Jane (a sonnet)
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(11-09-2013, 07:52 AM)ThePinsir Wrote:  Gonna ask "her" out when I pick her up from the airport this Sunday. With a sonnet. Women love sonnets Hysterical
Line 6 is choppy as hell. I need help Smile
Catch the REO Speedwagon reference.
Catch the Disney references. Women love Disney Hysterical
Her middle name is Jane.



No longer can I wait to bust a move,
to take a chance, a leap of faith, and see
if maybe, just maybe, our destinies
are tied, if Fate would smile and approve.
What started out as friendship can improve
into something too awesome to forsee. maybe: becoming a union(?) we cannot foresee
So, milady, I think that you and me.
should date (and maybe one day fall in love). I'd cut the "maybe fall in love", too presumptuous
So if you're feeling brave it's time to fly
upon a magic carpet all our own,
our spirits such that nothing can contain.
You'll never know if you're afraid to try
and neither of us likes to be alone--
what say you, then? This Tarzan needs his Jane!
I'm a sonnet idiot, but good luck.Smile
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Jane (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 11-09-2013, 07:52 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ellajam - 11-09-2013, 10:27 PM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by SirBrendan - 11-09-2013, 10:57 PM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 11-10-2013, 01:03 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by milo - 11-10-2013, 01:12 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ellajam - 11-10-2013, 01:14 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by Todd - 11-10-2013, 01:13 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 11-10-2013, 09:43 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by lainey - 11-10-2013, 11:41 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 11-10-2013, 11:45 AM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by newsclippings - 11-10-2013, 03:35 PM
RE: Jane (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 11-10-2013, 08:30 PM



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