Myosotis

[Todd]

Hey briefly on the subject of lines, let me give me thoughts on just a few of them.

Child,--I think a one word line as an opener is an extremely bad idea to pull someone in. What's more with the infant, buddha, line below I think it's fully unnecessary. I think you could cut it and start with line 2 and lose nothing.
When I saw you
I was afraid
To touch you
My hands
Unworthy--There's no reason this couldn't be pulled up one line.
Of your innocence
Fragile...Infant...Buddha!!
Your atomic smile
Enough to silence the world
Now,--This is probably your worst one word line. You could cut it and lose nothing at all. If you're going for one word lines and they are not a verb or a noun, they will likely fail. Again just opinion, but figured I'd give it.
After all the flowers
I remain
Years will pass--for something that your keeping minimal maybe cut the "will"
The wreaths and sprays
All discarded
In my thoughts
Always
One
Glorious--These one word lines don't add emphasis or tension, they just feel choppy. One is probably the strongest of the three, but they should all probably be just one line
Forget-me-not_

Just wanted to comment mostly on the line breaks here.

I don't know if it helped. Hope it does some.

Best,

Todd