Until Him

[SirBrendan]

The poem seems to have a confusing nature where the girl is experiencing her father like a lost lover. It's confusing. I'd be wary of certain lines that give that impression, such as, "or ached to ache inside, from loving long and hard. "

There is a double meaning to that phrase which is pretty inescapable for me; it's creepy following in the line directly after her never crying into her father.

I think with that line removed and some quick add-ins to ensure that this is the father rather than the obscure 'him, or that the obscure 'him' is a separate entity from the father, you could very much have a sweet poem here