Yellownape

[ellajam]

Hi, j, just a first read, so much well done here, my immediate thoughts:

You've punctuated but ignored the period. I'd like to know why, I think the poem needs them.

I sailed along until for your sunspot with just a pause or two, but got caught there and lost it.

I'll try again, nice piece, thanks for the read.

I know this post is meager for this workshop, just wanted to pass this on.

Yellownape

It caught my eye again:
to see you poised
like an emerald statue

kissed behind the neck
by the golden sun

in that darkened corner
of the kitchen, perched
outside your cage

standing atop the dull grey
wire-fencing, in a subtle
mockery of freedom

in which this cadre
of higher primates
have condescended,

to let you engage.

Yet there is a majesty
I see that chills me
lurking in your figure, when

catching the subtle curves
of your form protruding

from the dark: wings draped
like the most graceful of shields

about your face. You are
folded into yourself. Do
you recall ancestral dreams

of the Amazon, I muse?
Dreams of living among your kindred

in the treetops – in a place
where the monkeys neither

spoke, nor would dare
to capture you – where your
forbearers were happy to

ignore them, and laugh
by mimicking their foolish howls
in squawking tones: such colorful

music, to match the vibrant
sights of the rainforest by day

But now, you are reduced
to an emblem, of a beauty

that is forever lost to speaking
beings: and the monochrome

Prisons we build, for the
estranged animals we
each carry within

for your sunspot
is out of sight, now
as I try to stare into

Every wonder that you hide
my gaze failing to penetrate

the very things whereby
you were ever meant to fly

that, in this moment,
serve but one purpose:

to make sleep possible
by shielding you, at night

from the blessing and the
human curse, of artificial light