11-08-2013, 02:17 PM
I think this is one of the best poems i've seen on here so far. But, I've only been on here for a few days so.... (sorry, i'm a giver and a taker it's the gemini in me.)
The soul of the poem is defiantly there. the words click. Not sure about the last line but maybe i'm just to ignorant to understand it. Maybe end it on... and became messy patchwork... seems a stronger ending. But, this is your work and I'm sure you'll write what's best for you.....
Cheers,
Chazz
The soul of the poem is defiantly there. the words click. Not sure about the last line but maybe i'm just to ignorant to understand it. Maybe end it on... and became messy patchwork... seems a stronger ending. But, this is your work and I'm sure you'll write what's best for you.....
Cheers,
Chazz