I appreciate that milo. I feel like I'm still struggling to find the right way to express all of it. I don't think rev.2 is right. I do feel it detracts, but I also want something a bit different. So, I guess long winded way of saying I'm not happy with this one.
I spent two years at least between revisions. This may end up being one of those long term things that take a decade to get there.
It could be that I need to do columns (try doing that online). Where you have text running down side-by-side...line for line therapist observations for each line of the poem (kind of like a modified cleave thing).
I'm rambling
I spent two years at least between revisions. This may end up being one of those long term things that take a decade to get there.
It could be that I need to do columns (try doing that online). Where you have text running down side-by-side...line for line therapist observations for each line of the poem (kind of like a modified cleave thing).
I'm rambling
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson