11-08-2013, 08:34 AM
Most of these lines don't hold together very well. In a maze of truth, one truth? I guess, because: searching for the truth.
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
Feels sloppy, even with the rhyme.
Even then we loved,
Anonymously.
We rushed, I tripped and fell
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
Also feels sloppy, and tedious.
More than half of the poem consists of filler lines.
We grew
All the hardships,
Pushing through
Feels sloppy, even with the rhyme.
Even then we loved,
Anonymously.
We rushed, I tripped and fell
Growing distant,
But on the same trail
Also feels sloppy, and tedious.
More than half of the poem consists of filler lines.
