Lords of the Trees

[ChristopherSea]

Nicely done, the edit is so much more poignant for me.

One last comment: doesnt yard and boudoirs rhyme enoug to warrant a rhyme in the stanza above? That had been bugging me from the beginning but I didnt put my finger on it till now.

Thanks for the help cloudy! Yes, they do near rhyme and I could certeinly see if I could come up with another. However, I am a fan of random and slant rhyme for emphasis and sonics without necessarily carrying them throughout an entire piece. Cheers/Chris