Lords of the Trees

Lords of the Trees

justcloudy Offline

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11-08-2013, 06:33 AM

Nicely done, the edit is so much more poignant for me.

One last comment: doesnt yard and boudoirs rhyme enoug to warrant a rhyme in the stanza above? That had been bugging me from the beginning but I didnt put my finger on it till now.

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Lords of the Trees - by ChristopherSea - 11-07-2013, 10:11 PM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by justcloudy - 11-07-2013, 10:35 PM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by ChristopherSea - 11-07-2013, 10:59 PM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by Heartafire - 11-07-2013, 11:07 PM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by ChristopherSea - 11-07-2013, 11:12 PM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by tectak - 11-08-2013, 02:21 AM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by ChristopherSea - 11-08-2013, 03:43 AM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by justcloudy - 11-08-2013, 06:33 AM

RE: Lords of the Trees - by ChristopherSea - 11-08-2013, 07:12 AM

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