Lords of the Trees

[ChristopherSea]

What I like: the topic; the original wording; the length.
What I don't like: these are little boys. that's not how they talk. personal preference really; "unbeknownst" is awkward

The likes outweigh the dislikes, but I feel it's too distant. Kinda wispy. Needs more punch.

-justcloudy

Thank you so much for your time and critique cloudy! This is a reminisence and not the voice of a boy. However, I will re-examine this impression in an edit if possible. Although, I personally like it's sonics herein, I could certainly find a subtitute for unbeknownst. Much obliged for you sharing you read with me!/Chris