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11-07-2013, 10:05 AM
(This post was last modified: 11-07-2013, 10:20 AM by billy.)
(11-06-2013, 03:13 PM)milo Wrote: (11-06-2013, 02:51 PM)billy Wrote: i know this is the for fun forum but i think it's excellent.
love the mississippi enjambment
I would be lying if I said I wasn't pleased that it worked for you. I had originally written it with whitespace but couldn't really pull it off so the changeover is painful. I really wasn't even going to bother posting it all.
the wait because of the enjambment in that part gives the read that split second to remember all the games they played where counting as in hide and seek was mandatory. for me the poem hangs just the perfect amount each time it's used.
(11-07-2013, 01:23 AM)milo Wrote: (11-07-2013, 01:14 AM)Todd Wrote: Can't argue with you. They would be wrong, but every site has its prejudices.
Yah, I used to be a huge contributor over there and every time I am tempted to go back I am reminded how tedious poetry critique without dialogue is.
i'm guilty of sometimes not engaging in dialogue enough and instead just critiquing inline. recently i have been making suggestions and talking about the poem re intent ex, (i'm still not there yet but i'm trying :J
