The wind

The wind

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11-06-2013, 03:10 PM

Hi Keith,
I am enjoying the tightness of your poem. Very well done.

The last two lines (either version) struck me as off. The military men I know drink to forget not to remember. I only know about two dozen ex-military which is not much, maybe my observation is incorrect.

Thank you for your poem.
Smiles,
Graystar

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The wind - by Keith - 11-04-2013, 05:18 AM

RE: The wind - by Keaner222 - 11-04-2013, 12:50 PM

RE: The wind - by Keith - 11-05-2013, 07:47 AM

RE: The wind - by Charlesjoseph - 11-05-2013, 08:53 AM

RE: The wind - by Keith - 11-05-2013, 09:25 AM

RE: The wind - by Charlesjoseph - 11-05-2013, 10:19 AM

RE: The wind - by Keith - 11-07-2013, 04:54 AM

RE: The wind - by bena - 11-05-2013, 12:24 AM

RE: The wind - by Nick - 11-05-2013, 01:56 AM

RE: The wind - by ChristopherSea - 11-06-2013, 08:27 AM

RE: The wind - by Graystar - 11-06-2013, 03:10 PM

RE: The wind - by lainey - 11-06-2013, 03:32 PM

RE: The wind - by Charlesjoseph - 11-06-2013, 10:12 PM

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