11-06-2013, 12:24 AM
Hey Todd,
thanks for the help & input. Here's what I came up with using your advice. I tried a few things here, let me know what you think.
Chazz
Whiskey Epiphany
With the poison fresh on my breath,
I have once again eluded death.
Like cactus for the shaman,
I have found a way to rattle my soul.
And although I feel like a tree,
that has been hollowed out into a canoe,
I have acquired screaming spirit wisdom
from the excavated pulp of my endeavor.
When my moment of clarity arrived,
I was lying naked on the bathroom floor.
Covered in my own fluids, I uncovered
(a man afraid to die.)
Awake and alive,
I will try to heed his screams.
thanks for the help & input. Here's what I came up with using your advice. I tried a few things here, let me know what you think.
Chazz
Whiskey Epiphany
With the poison fresh on my breath,
I have once again eluded death.
Like cactus for the shaman,
I have found a way to rattle my soul.
And although I feel like a tree,
that has been hollowed out into a canoe,
I have acquired screaming spirit wisdom
from the excavated pulp of my endeavor.
When my moment of clarity arrived,
I was lying naked on the bathroom floor.
Covered in my own fluids, I uncovered
(a man afraid to die.)
Awake and alive,
I will try to heed his screams.