From Outside a New Light

[Graystar]

Hello Timothy, I loved this poem. It spoke to me and I was surprised by the other viewers who didn't just love it too.

The song draweth nigh, I loved this, it set a tone that is rare lately
for the singer doth deceive
A pedestal or a throne Excellent two lines, gives the singer a depth for me
for a basket without weave
To each seller is himself
Each himself to be sold Not fond of this second use of himself
two penny for your strife, pennies
all silver for half gold loved this!
Along and long tithe Not liking the along and long, use a different adjective
since the river gave gain
A dark shift that drives on
a soft shadow through the rain Do you really need to start this line with an a?
From ashes to ashes
For we all must fall down I loved this, it is from a childhood song and I felt it was perfect
A slim glance at king's eye do you need the in this? the king's eye
A fist curled for king's crown loved this

I love your poem just as it is it meant a lot to me, reminded me of ballads, I don't mean to offend my the suggestions I made.
With sincere joy,
Graystar