The wind

[Keith]

Did you write "can" twice on purpose on line 8? Other than that I very much enjoyed it

Thanks for your comment Keaner222, yes I did write it twice I was trying to show an image of a Cancan dancer but wasn't sure how the word was presented, Can Can or Can-Can or Cancan I have settled for the later. Thanks Keith

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Tobacco spelling. Other than that, very rich descriptive language for wind. Enjoyed it a lot.

Many thanks Bena, there are quite a few mistakes in this one, thanks for pointing out the Tabaco and the kind words. Best Keith

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Carries its freight,
rattle and clang,
trails anchors into land.

Sea storms and poppies, Do you need this comma?
greet an old sailor,
slopping early rise rum.

Flutters the skirt, And is this comma required?
of his Cancan tattoo, Props for the Cancan reference
spits out Tobacco bits Why the cap on tobacco?
rolled for his first brew.

Smoke blows complaints
in sheltered accommodation,
drinks to remember
a perilous occupation.

A nice bit of work.
Thanks.

Thanks Nick, comma cap crazy, no excuses I should have read it through more thoroughly, a quick edit will fix. Best Keith