Out of the Hollow

[Todd]

It's funny that Ella mentioned cutting. I'd been thinking about that, but wasn't sure where I came down on the issue. Well, if this were mine here's what would remain:

My vibrant drum
is but a stump
devoid of its cavity.

Your sweet flute
is merely a stick
without a cylindrical bore.

why should we
have any longings
for things we don't possess?

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That feels interesting and thought provoking. I would cut the stanza's below:


If music can burgeon
from within these voids
and fill our emptiness,--This feels completely handled by the next question. I also am not a fan of "within these voids". It just feels unnecessary.

Let us fill the vacuum of desire
with the wealth of music.--vacuum of desire and wealth of music feel a bit too constructed, and draw me away from what you've already accomplished with the question.

Just some thoughts