11-04-2013, 08:15 AM
(10-26-2013, 01:34 AM)Euan Wrote: I enjoyed the repetition of the first line in each of the stanzas, has a timeless effect. The consistency if your repetition compliments your structure, you convey both a similar message and a more subtle other meaning with each repeated line in their respective stanzas, I am impressed. I haven't much to say as to what could be improved.Many thanks for your kind words Euan, I have tried to clear up my message and remove some of the cliché, thanks Keith
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