The attic (post edit)

The attic (post edit)

MpoemsR
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11-03-2013, 04:15 PM

I love this poem! Absolutely brilliant with so much potency. There is, however, a one error which I will point out.
In the second line, the commas isn't needed at all.

I like how this poem is one of those double interpretable poems:
1. A normal aboned attic
2. Memories and wants inside your mind left to be forgotten, where the "bars of light" is the remaining vague grasp of those memories already fading...

BRILLIANT!

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The attic (post edit) - by Ryan_w_r - 05-30-2013, 10:11 AM

RE: Short poem - by rowens - 05-31-2013, 12:23 AM

RE: Short poem - by Ryan_w_r - 05-31-2013, 02:55 AM

RE: Short poem - by Brownlie - 05-31-2013, 04:39 AM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by FayandFire - 06-03-2013, 01:27 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by Bunx - 06-04-2013, 10:44 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by Ryan_w_r - 06-05-2013, 02:45 AM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by UnicornRainbowCake - 06-05-2013, 03:55 AM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by autumnleaves - 06-08-2013, 05:18 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by Ryan_w_r - 06-09-2013, 09:08 AM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by Brownlie - 06-09-2013, 10:23 AM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-09-2013, 01:28 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by tectak - 10-30-2013, 09:43 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by Ryan_w_r - 11-03-2013, 03:24 PM

RE: The attic (post edit) - by MpoemsR - 11-03-2013, 04:15 PM

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