the dark ocean that is my mind

the dark ocean that is my mind

MpoemsR
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11-03-2013, 04:00 PM

This poem may be good in the eyes of some viewers, however it seems to lack more subtlety in metaphors etc. I suggest that you keep working and do what makes you happy, but please induce more subtlety in your poems - a poem doesn't have to be direct in meaning.

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the dark ocean that is my mind - by minear - 07-20-2013, 05:01 PM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by Malu - 10-18-2013, 08:44 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by viviencherylin - 10-22-2013, 09:56 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by tectak - 10-22-2013, 11:25 PM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by ThePinsir - 10-23-2013, 12:51 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by tectak - 10-23-2013, 03:42 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by ehabuncensored - 10-23-2013, 05:29 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by Todd - 10-23-2013, 05:43 AM

RE: the dark ocean that is my mind - by MpoemsR - 11-03-2013, 04:00 PM

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