11-02-2013, 03:42 AM
Thanks a lot for take the time to review this Milo; I really appreciate it. I want the first stanza in the sing-song iambic. Then for the second stanza, I wanted it a little uglier (to reflect the self doubt and such) so I tried to invert the metre. For the final bit, I simply dropped the metre entirely to reflect the overall message of it.
Really though, I couldn't for the life of me hear syllabic stress before doing this poem, so it was very much an incredibly useful exercise for me. I understand sometimes accents and the such can affect how certain stress is stated, but it seems from your--again appreciated-- review that I've got the general sense for it but still need to practice and review speaking rhythm a bit more.
Again, thank you very much Milo, and I believe my meter will be much tighter in the future for it
Really though, I couldn't for the life of me hear syllabic stress before doing this poem, so it was very much an incredibly useful exercise for me. I understand sometimes accents and the such can affect how certain stress is stated, but it seems from your--again appreciated-- review that I've got the general sense for it but still need to practice and review speaking rhythm a bit more.
Again, thank you very much Milo, and I believe my meter will be much tighter in the future for it
If I could say only one thing before I die, it'd probably be,
"Please don't kill me"
"Please don't kill me"