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[billy]

She sat
by the bedroom window,
her sights too remote sounds like she's a sniper
than the white cherubs
descending
from the winter moon.

In her arms,
a heart is locked
inside a little treasure chest.

Nobody

not even her mother,
knitting downstairs,
knows
she left the key
back home in Nazareth.

note: Nazareth or Barangay Nazareth - a town in Cagayan de Oro City, Philippines

i like verse 1 and 2. and "nobody" on it's own works. not sure "knows" does?
cagayan de oro is a beautiful sounding set of words so instead of the footer why not just make it the last line.

back home in Nazareth
Cagayan de Oro

for me lines 3 and 4 need a bit of work as they leave the reader confused. would more work better than too

all in all a nice read which evokes a certain sadness. thanks JD