False Prophet

[drithebee]

I liked the "false prophet" comparison. I think you can REALLY develop that image into something awesome. Besides that...meh. A break-up poem that's been written 10,000 times.

I also think you'll find that the people on this website frown upon capitalizing the first letter of each line. Only capitalize if it starts another sentence.

I do agree there is development to be made, especially since this poem is discussing a kinsmen's betrayal, not a lover's loss. I want to improve so that the true meaning is conveyed to the audience.