The Check-Out

The Check-Out

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#18

10-29-2013, 09:24 AM

great editing so far tygre and i can't see as you can do much more but i have a suggestion for the cane line

leaning on his cane,

leading with his cane
or

reaching with his cane.

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The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-25-2013, 11:09 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by FatalBanana - 10-25-2013, 11:35 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-25-2013, 12:31 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by ChristopherSea - 10-25-2013, 07:52 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-26-2013, 12:18 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-25-2013, 10:28 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by RyanRader13 - 10-26-2013, 12:59 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-26-2013, 11:25 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-27-2013, 10:00 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by billy - 10-27-2013, 10:59 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-27-2013, 11:09 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-27-2013, 12:07 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by billy - 10-27-2013, 05:45 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-27-2013, 07:09 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-27-2013, 08:15 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-28-2013, 10:04 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-28-2013, 11:21 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by billy - 10-29-2013, 09:24 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-29-2013, 11:39 AM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-29-2013, 12:29 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by billy - 10-29-2013, 12:39 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by tigrflye - 10-29-2013, 12:41 PM

RE: The Check-Out - by Todd - 10-29-2013, 12:46 PM

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