Some Poets

[Nick]

some poets
when they write
it's their words what are you trying to say with this line?this is the set up
they look like colored chalk drawings interesting
on cement
on a sidewalk redundant? maybe 'on a cement sidewalk'cement could be a floor and sidewalk is used for clarification and also on a separate line to build the movement
beautiful
artistic
delicate not sure delicate is the right word. i dont really think 'delicate' with this image.
folks stop and gaze hmm.. not really fond of the word 'folks' here
admire and walk around
nothin' wrong with that
then the dark comes the dark? hmm. this was a strange line to me. maybe you want to say something a bit more obvious like 'then darkness falls'always been a little shy about usin' cliches
their words cannot blaze guidance really cool line
are trampled without regard fantastic continuation of the chalk on the cement image
and an errant shower
rebirths the grey
the hard grey
the hard grey that gleams dully gleams dully is a contradiction?dully modifies the gleam from bright to just some shine
in the damp meterless dawn what a fantastic line

Interesting piece. I definitely liked the imagery created. But I am a little confused as to what the image is really trying to say. Perhaps that some poets paint beautiful pictures that are nice to look at, but that don't last because they don't hold inherent meaning. if this is so, i think it needs a bit more development. Thanks for the read!

What the image is "really trying to say" is whatever you want it to say.
Thanks for your views.