The Check-Out

[Todd]

I see you've altered some of the 4-3-4-3 to accommodate the natural fall of the words. I like it. Let's look at an alternative to your last strophe (I went with italics instead of single quotations):

"My husband likes to flirt with that;
he says, I shouldn't mind.
I'm wondering if, for revenge,
you'd like to fuck me blind?"

or perhaps

"My husband always looks for every
set of tits to find.
I'm wondering if, for revenge,
you'd like to fuck me blind?"

or maybe

"My husband always looks to flirt
to this I am resigned.
I'm wondering if, for revenge,
you'd like to fuck me blind?"

Just thoughts