So, I Failed your Rorschach Test

[ChristopherSea]

This is a really good poem Chris. It is weightless in all the right parts. It deserves a little time. Edit as fast as you want, but don't consider it set in stone, you can still come back to it later.

Modification, adjectives mostly, may be your main issue.

Here is a more explanatory iteration of my problem with the ending:

of [your dissected] --> organs <-- [blotted on] cards.

On reads better than upon, but
You have the already modified organs, followed by another line that just further modifies the noun in the previous, or penult line, with another adjective.

A verb, such as

Blotting the cards

may be better. But the ing's have their own weaknesses as well, if you could find a way to crunch it down to the noun (blot), it would strengthen it considerably.

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Your rapid fire editing process is entertaining. You clearly enjoy writing (and workshopping)

Why not break on conform instead of must I?

In everything,
why must I conform

Or

In everything, why must I conform

It presents a nice entendre, does it not?

Also, why no comma before cryptic?

But take some time and think about it. I don't want to be the one who screwed up your poem

Too late.

Do we have an emoticon for the finger?

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Our the verb "blots".

OK trueE, once my head stops spinning from all of the rapid fire edits, I shall give it another run through with your newest suggestions in mind.