10-27-2013, 04:24 PM
Todd, this is a very evocative, expressive piece. I think that the bulk of it strays from the theme promised by the opening line, by virtue of the opacity of many of the images, which is honestly disappointing. Then again, this is the "poetry for fun" section, and I certainly had fun with it. Quite a zany ride. 
“Poetry is mother-tongue of the human race; as gardening is older than agriculture; painting than writing; song than declamation; parables,—than deductions; barter,—than trade”
― Johann Hamann
― Johann Hamann