Ship of Fools

Ship of Fools

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10-27-2013, 11:03 AM

(10-25-2013, 04:31 AM)ChristopherSea Wrote: Dope christened vessel
navigates deeply in vein
on sham adventures

for me christened takes something away.
doped vessel would be a suggestion.
i'd also suggest removing [deeply]
i enjoyed the wordplay :J:

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Ship of Fools - by ChristopherSea - 10-25-2013, 04:31 AM

RE: Ship of Fools - by Douglaspocock - 10-25-2013, 05:53 PM

RE: Ship of Fools - by Magpie - 10-26-2013, 04:55 AM

RE: Ship of Fools - by emerald13 - 10-27-2013, 07:54 AM

RE: Ship of Fools - by billy - 10-27-2013, 11:03 AM

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