The Waters Drag me

The Waters Drag me

milo

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10-26-2013, 11:41 PM

(10-26-2013, 11:36 PM)Euan Wrote: I'm not sure Milo, do you believe the line breaks are inadequate?

It reads like you weren't sure. Line breaks are pretty important in free verse. The ones are disorienting.

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The Waters Drag me - by Euan - 10-26-2013, 10:55 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by milo - 10-26-2013, 11:24 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by Euan - 10-26-2013, 11:36 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by milo - 10-26-2013, 11:41 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by Todd - 10-26-2013, 11:44 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by Euan - 10-26-2013, 11:46 PM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by milo - 10-27-2013, 01:45 AM

RE: The Waters Drag me - by Euan - 10-27-2013, 06:56 AM

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