10-26-2013, 01:34 AM
I enjoyed the repetition of the first line in each of the stanzas, has a timeless effect. The consistency if your repetition compliments your structure, you convey both a similar message and a more subtle other meaning with each repeated line in their respective stanzas, I am impressed. I haven't much to say as to what could be improved.
You'll find out who I am within the imagery, it pleads 'fuck the metaphors and scream'