First "Italian" Sonnet

First "Italian" Sonnet

ThePinsir Offline

member

Posts: 71
Threads: 8
Joined: Oct 2013

#10

10-25-2013, 11:53 PM

Version 2.0 in the OP. Guys, thanks SOOOO much for your feedback!
I played around a bit with enjambment, tried to get rid of some wordiness, and tried to deviate from STRICT i.p.

You guys are awesome.

My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!

« Next Oldest | Next Newest »

Messages In This Thread

First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-24-2013, 04:15 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by heslopian - 10-24-2013, 07:12 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by Todd - 10-24-2013, 07:19 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-24-2013, 10:08 PM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by billy - 10-25-2013, 07:57 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by billy - 10-24-2013, 12:02 PM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by jdeirmend - 10-24-2013, 11:51 PM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by tectak - 10-25-2013, 08:34 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by tigrflye - 10-25-2013, 11:00 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-25-2013, 11:53 PM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by Todd - 10-26-2013, 12:27 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-26-2013, 12:41 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by milo - 10-26-2013, 02:36 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-26-2013, 04:37 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by ThePinsir - 10-26-2013, 02:49 AM

RE: First "Italian" Sonnet - by milo - 10-26-2013, 03:11 AM

Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)

Login
Username:
Password:	Lost Password?
	Remember me