First "Italian" Sonnet

[Todd]

Just a minor comment, there are certain lines that might be interesting to enjamb (obviously doing this will screw up your entire rhyme scheme so I realize it's an undertaking). Line two and three for instance: Just makes sense but is mostly a filler word so maybe you have room to experiment. I like your words in L3 "the tone of silken skin" Silken skin itself is somewhat cliche but having tone apply to skin tone is very nicely done. I wonder if there would be some way on line two you could end with "tone" and have it mean some sort of noise then break the line to skin tone.

Just a thought to push this one a little more.

Best,

Todd