10-23-2013, 04:29 AM
tigrflye:
the "scarcely a man" bit is because I'm 23, yet I have no wife or kids, I'm not in the military, and don't have any REAL responsibility. So while I'm indeed fully grown, I'm not so sure one would call me a "man". Does that make sense?
Also, I think "hence" was supposed to be "thence". Honestly, I just needed another syllable lol.
As for everything else, I appreciate the input!
the "scarcely a man" bit is because I'm 23, yet I have no wife or kids, I'm not in the military, and don't have any REAL responsibility. So while I'm indeed fully grown, I'm not so sure one would call me a "man". Does that make sense?
Also, I think "hence" was supposed to be "thence". Honestly, I just needed another syllable lol.
As for everything else, I appreciate the input!
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!