Alice in the Asylum: Psychiatric Transcript (Revision 5)

[ChristopherSea]

Hi Alison,

I'm tempted to pull all the notes down to the bottom except for one psychiatric lead in. I also can work on bringing up the fear quotient with the bandersnatch section.

Much Appreicated,

Todd

Todd, As I mentioned previously, since the psych notes seem to be an integral part of the piece, you could try to pull the notes more into the poem doing something like this:

HISTORY OF PRESENT ILLNESS
13-year-old female; incoherent, disheveled.
Wandering costermongers eel cart.
Evaluation required; police request
under lunacy act of 1845.

PRESENTING PROBLEM
Exhibits periods of long silence
broken by persecutory outbursts.
Patients first communication
after 4 hours of silence:

It is this dyslexic language I hate
words that scurry and slink
rearrange themselves before
I can speak. But somebody killed...

You get the drift; just a thought./Chris