Young Man's Call

[tigrflye]

Hi Pinsir,
Thanks for the read. I really enjoyed it and I think you have a nice easy rythm. To me, this reads like a coming of age kinda story.. look at all these tales of greatness and excitement. I'm ready for mine.
A lot of mythology.. which isn't necessarily my forte.
I've also been informed that only psuedo-poets capitalize each line. If it doesn't start a new sentence, leave it lowercase.
----

Less moons than me had Alex seen before
Adventure call'd to Hellenize the Earth.
Thus I, full-grown (scarcely a "man"), want more:slight contradiction? Fully grown but scarcely a man.
To seek, to find, to show the gods my worth.I think the list "to seek, to find, to show" is wordy.
A call from Menelaus to stir emotion
To break the bough and send me tumbling free.I like the visual
From Ithica I'll sail my spirit's ocean;
Atlantis' song, from sirens' lips, haunts me.
Perhaps Calypso's Chamber is my cave
Or Charybdis swallows hence my soul.hence? As in "therefore"? Ergo? To me it reads like you are saying " Or a sea monster swallows for this reason my soul"
But there will burn in me a fire bravethis has been said before. I'd rather something more fresh
When I step forth and claim my rightful role.
On destiny, with zeal, I now advance
For in this life there is no second chance.
----------

Edit: I don't know why the spaces on the last couplet aren't showing...

-Jenn