Young Man's Call

[ThePinsir]

I've been doing this poetry thing for about a month. I (mostly) stick to blank verse and Shakespearean sonnets because they're fun, and I've never read or studied any contemporary stuff. This one is called "Young Man's Call".
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Version 2.0

Less moons than me had Alex seen before
Adventure called to Hellenize the Earth.
Thus I, full-grown (scarcely a "man"), want more:
To seek, to find, to show the gods my worth.
A call from Menelaus to stir emotion
To break the bough and send me tumbling free.
From Ithica I'll sail my spirit's ocean;
Atlantis' song, from sirens' lips, haunts me.
Perhaps Calypso's Chamber is my cave
Or Charybdis swallows there my soul.
But there will burn in me a fire brave
When I step forth and claim my rightful role.
On destiny, with zeal, I now advance
For in this life there is no second chance.
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ORIGINAL:


"Less moons than me had Alex seen before
Adventure call'd to Hellenize the Earth.
Thus I, full-grown (scarcely a "man"), want more:
To seek, to find, to show the gods my worth.
A call from Menelaus to stir emotion
To break the bough and send me tumbling free.
From Ithica I'll sail my spirit's ocean;
Atlantis' song, from sirens' lips, haunts me.
Perhaps Calypso's Chamber is my cave
Or Charybdis swallows hence my soul.
But there will burn in me a fire brave
When I step forth and claim my rightful role.
On destiny, with zeal, I now advance
For in this life there is no second chance."
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Edit: I don't know why the spaces on the last couplet aren't showing...