10-19-2013, 04:43 PM
JunKai, thank you for your critique.
This poem has taught me two things:
One, that there are rare situations in which, once the moment has passed, I have no real desire to alter a poem to fit anyone else's idea of what that moment should have been, and
two, that presumably women can have no concerns about success other than that which is measured against sex and vulnerability to men's whims.
I may edit it at some point in the future, but for now I think I will relegate it to evil memory.
This poem has taught me two things:
One, that there are rare situations in which, once the moment has passed, I have no real desire to alter a poem to fit anyone else's idea of what that moment should have been, and
two, that presumably women can have no concerns about success other than that which is measured against sex and vulnerability to men's whims.
I may edit it at some point in the future, but for now I think I will relegate it to evil memory.
It could be worse