Punctuation Or Not

[rayheinrich]

I am attempting to add punctuation to my poems which were written without it.

After weeding out unneeded words, all the ands and buts are gone, so now I end up with a wall of commas.

example:

Half glassed for winter
half screened to catch summer's breeze.
Your home sang your soul
cradled it during your stay
released it to soar in joy.

Not a pretty sight.

Maybe the solution is not to add punctuation, but to make sure the poem is clear straight through without it. It almost feels like a cheat, clearing up confusion with little marks instead of better lines.

I'm torn.

whats wrong wiv it

I thought I couldn't put a period after breeze because the first two lines aren't a complete sentence.

They are. Write it out as a sentence, punctuate it, then break it back up:

Half glassed for winter, half screened to catch summer's breeze.
Your home sang your soul, cradled it during your stay, released it to soar in joy.