All These Tales of Suicide

[billy]

Nick,
Thank you. I agree on the points you made. Except for the line about the tree's arms. I like the way your suggestion reads except for trying to rhyme arms with be. As Billy pointed out not all of the rhymes actually "rhyme" but I like them to sound closer than that.


Billy,
perfect suggestions I think. Thank you.
I usually do prefer poems that rhyme,.. at least for my own poetry, at least right now.
Admittedly I tried to pair some words that didn't quite rhyme, and sacrificed to telling the story instead of the rhyme.
You are saying I can't get away with (wage, pay).. (dared, there).. (left, test) ? Haha. Tough crowd

i suppose you could get away with anything really
but perfect is sometimes easier to pull off than half rhyme.

the above said, sometimes half rhymes or near rhymes work well.

these do work well enough, i say this because of what you said, (you know what you went for) often people including myself go for perfect rhyme and get a few near rhymes without noticing, does that make sense?