Rest In Peace Uncle

[billy]

the poem after the first two lines tells me (the reader) nothing of your uncle but lots about you. so the title doesn't work.

nor do the parts about you. they're weak and obvious and wordy.
it's way to over the top and tries to hard to be poetic instead of trying to be poetry.

I see it all around me
its everywhere i go this line is almost verbatim from a wet wet wet song. and the one above is pretty close as well. (love is all around me)
the pain you left me with
the suffering that i show
theres just one thing to blame
for the absence in my heart
the life you left behind
still haunts and tears apart
these words were forced to leave
before i could even speak
endlessly cut short
force my hope to sink
holding on your hand
i feel it drag me down
i try to cry for help
but can not make a sound
i fall into this trench
impossible to rise
i suffer and i cry
too long into the night
you were my life and breath
my birth and now my death
theres no way to pretend
this is my largest test
i was to fail right from the start
still broken in my mind
i'll keep you in my heart
a place that i can't find
I wish that I could tell you
how much that i still care
the emptiness is blinding
whispers prevaid the air
you left me far too early
I tell you through my tears
how much i wish i had you
just for a few more years