Room at the Inn

[Nick]

You know yhe imagery is very vivid, but the setting is not very descriptive, I get a clear picture of the actions, which is good and is the main meat of the storyline but the characters and setting are cloudy, its clear that the place is crowded and the second stanza hints at description but it's still too cloudy, I think it could be good development with a few literary tricks

Always ready to learn a "few literary tricks".
Show me.