10-11-2013, 09:15 AM
(10-11-2013, 08:54 AM)Erthona Wrote: That's a fun description. You might want to change up the first line a little, as currently it is a perfect line of iambic tetrameter. I was expecting the rest of the poem to be the same, as it is such a regular line; it took me a second to get past it. Just a thought, I know this is in the fun section.Thanks Dale! Glad you found it fun
Dale
I never highlight my flaws or deficits
Because none of that will matter when death visits
Because none of that will matter when death visits

