10-11-2013, 07:11 AM
Ryan, I tried that. Thank you!
Todd,
Your comments are deeply appreciated. Always. I made some of the easier edits and I will ponder the rest.
Can I have a "crispy flock of flipping leaves"? Hahaha.
Its so much harder with meter and feet..
Moving "like" to the next line fixed the line break but I think it may have effed up the feet. Which I will allow if the rest of our community doesn't attack it
Perhaps taking a break from it for awhile will freshen up my brain. Trying hard will wear ya out.
Todd,
Your comments are deeply appreciated. Always. I made some of the easier edits and I will ponder the rest.
Can I have a "crispy flock of flipping leaves"? Hahaha.
Its so much harder with meter and feet..
Moving "like" to the next line fixed the line break but I think it may have effed up the feet. Which I will allow if the rest of our community doesn't attack it

Perhaps taking a break from it for awhile will freshen up my brain. Trying hard will wear ya out.
