10-11-2013, 04:55 AM
(10-10-2013, 07:29 AM)Malu Wrote: 15 to startHi malu,
A collision
Scatters around aimlessly?
2 down, one sound, one streak
Decisions, decisions
Eyes locked on a green blaze baize?
I pounce
With unerring execution
Now stuck behind
The fatal infinity
The indirect approach seems best
Catching the unsuspecting
Scarlet with my serpentine
4 more bands
Then I can
Dance with the raven
A ray of sun catches my eye
I stare at it
Contemplating
A blind shot has been taken
The sun and jupiter spiral
How fitting that only the sun remains
No longer in my interest
I alter my attention
Focused on the cascade focussed
As it falls
There stands
A well-rooted violet
No matter
For it has been trampled
All that is between
Me and the raven
Is that pesky sun
There's no allies left there are
To make the sacrifice
This time
The light is quickly swallowed
Into a black hole
Nothing left but just you and me, raven
No more avoiding
No more hiding
No more running away
We both knew this moment was upon us
I hope you're ready
Because I'm sending you home now
Back to the shadows
Where you should have never crawled out from Yoda speaking Swedish.
This is obviously a nonsense poem of the highest calibre and is to be commended. I see this as a completely transfixing dissertation on the metaphorical pool table...and the associated game-play. I am impressed by the almost imperceptible shift from bar-pool to the darker side of human deviation. Stunning.
Look, if It wasn't for the complete lack of punctuation, rhythm, rhyme, meter, syntactical competance and ability to check spelling it would be perfect. Please, don't take me seriously and I will reciprocate.
Best,
tectak

