Strike
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(09-27-2013, 08:19 AM)Wjames Wrote:  Roar and rumble, twist and turn,
loose the lightning’s pent-up burn.
Flash and flicker, dance and dive,
for an instant feel alive.
This has a real buzz to it and conveys that feeling of excitement you get from watching storms. It also made me think of that drunken dance we've all done when a really good song comes on and you give yourself over to the music even if it is a bit David Brent its still good to let go. One point the last line seem off but I can't put my finger on it should it be instance or in an instant.... I'm not sure but no matter I still really enjoyed this little jive. Best TOMH

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Strike - by Wjames - 09-27-2013, 08:19 AM
RE: Strike - by Keith - 10-10-2013, 06:01 AM
RE: Strike - by Sonata - 10-10-2013, 09:52 PM
RE: Strike - by RyanRader13 - 10-12-2013, 03:20 AM
RE: Strike - by jringo_ - 10-12-2013, 03:23 AM
RE: Strike - by Laura Marx - 10-12-2013, 10:20 AM
RE: Strike - by tectak - 10-12-2013, 03:44 PM
RE: Strike - by Laura Marx - 10-12-2013, 04:14 PM
RE: Strike - by billy - 10-12-2013, 06:14 PM
RE: Strike - by Wjames - 10-21-2013, 01:33 AM



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