kiss again (an etheree)

[billy]

First, my name is Jeffrey, not Jeffers. Please respect that.

first off, we're not that kind of place jeff, we accept nic's as nic's and not as real life name, as such we have no laws on enforcing people to use nic's verbatim.
almost nailed it on the syllable count apart from L7.
for me some of the line breaks feel forced, like i'm pausing when i should be reading. some lines feel as though they could be perked up by using words of more than one syllable. (okay, the last line)
all the my are of minor issue for me but to end three of ten lines with my sort of sticks out like a sore thumb
thanks for the read.

Kiss
again
my throat, my
ears, my eyes, my
hands, my naked thighs,
my toes, my fingertips.
Your kiss is a maddening, [6] instead of [7]for me this is the best line because of it's ambiguity
a god’s voice, a rage against my
skin that makes me senseless to my sense feels awkward, are you saying it makes you senseless? i'm not sure but don't you either have sense or you don't.
of where I end and where I, rough, begin. a bit wordy but a decent finish