kiss again (an etheree)

[Jeffrey Gibson]

Hi Jeffery
This is the first time I've seen an etheree so thank you for the introduction, could I just say you seem to be struggling with the workshop, I think you have had some great feedback here that would help you improve the poem, you make a very good case for not changing or nullifying critique, however the point remains open that maddening just doesn't sound right to the average reader and it can cause a stumble. As for the suggestion from Milo about a switcharoo on how you could change the focus, I though this was an excellent suggestion and very helpful. I'm not sure what you want to achieve and you are relatively new to the site but reading your replies does not make me want to offer crit even when it is obvious you could benefit from it. In my opinion you will put people off commenting and that would be a shame because you obviously have a lot to offer this community and I have really enjoyed reading your poetry. Best TOMH

Thanks for your thoughts.

Jeffrey