kiss again (an etheree)

[bena]

The line that bothered me most was L7 --might be a language barrier issue, but maddening is the adjective form, and I *think* you've used it as a noun because it doesn't modify anything. You could use maddeningness, but that's just an oddball of a word to me. Like I said it could be the difference of countries, not sure.

I didn't mind so much the god's voice, because I think certain things are very transient by nature...and a really nice kiss is.

mel.