10-08-2013, 12:17 PM
Tom,
Blank verse tetrameter, although you do drop into a type of rhyme at 11pm.
Yes, very swelteringly morose. Much use of alliteration.
"pickled from the inside out, and outside in." I count 6 feet, how many do you count?
"Orange" nearly threw me off until I remembered that some of you make two syllables of the word.
Very picturesque I suppose, but the focus wanders so I have trouble being able to make good use of your images. 10pm had that sort of "West Side Story" feel to it, but after that nothing really seemed to hold it together.
Dale
Blank verse tetrameter, although you do drop into a type of rhyme at 11pm.
Yes, very swelteringly morose. Much use of alliteration.
"pickled from the inside out, and outside in." I count 6 feet, how many do you count?
"Orange" nearly threw me off until I remembered that some of you make two syllables of the word.
Very picturesque I suppose, but the focus wanders so I have trouble being able to make good use of your images. 10pm had that sort of "West Side Story" feel to it, but after that nothing really seemed to hold it together.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.