Bloodletting

[SimikPK]

I want to collapse,
and seep between atoms what about "among" atoms, unless intentional
like mountain mist
shifting through valleys, before
sinking to vaporous oceans.

I want nature to scream, and agree with the rest
strike me with her lighting,
so that I might split
like a backyard tree. very nice image, but it is so unlike "atoms", it might somehow disturb the unity of the imagery. I have no problems with those spatially big, which are less specific than "backyard tree"

Smear me across a thousand miles. thousand miles sounds little like a cliche to me
I want to be windswept,
and faceless.

I want nothing,
and everything. cliche. really.

I want disintegration. I would consider removing this one, but the word disintegration works well, it might be the connector of "nature" and "atomsô

Exhale —